我想让您现在帮我看看
wǒ xiǎng ràng nín xiàn zài bāng wǒ kàn kàn
这是我想投稿给校报的文章
zhè shì wǒ xiǎng tóu gǎo gěi xiào bào de wén zhāng
想请您给我提点意见
xiǎng qǐng nín gěi wǒ tí diǎn yì jiàn
开头写得不错
kāi tóu xiě de bù cuò
您全部帮我看看呗
nín quán bù bāng wǒ kàn kàn bei
我觉得我的中间
wǒ jué de wǒ de zhōng jiān
特别是结尾的部分
tè bié shì jié wěi de bù fèn
我自己不太满意
wǒ zì jǐ bù tài mǎn yì
您给我提提修改意见
nín gěi wǒ tí tí xiū gǎi yì jiàn
佟彤 是这样
tóng tóng shì zhè yàng
我手头呢 还有些工作要忙
wǒ shǒu tóu ne hái yǒu xiē gōng zuò yào máng
等我忙完了
děng wǒ máng wán le
一会儿慢慢给你看 好吗
yī huì er màn màn gěi nǐ kàn hǎo ma
那 您忙您的
nà nín máng nín de
我在旁边给您读
wǒ zài páng biān gěi nín dú
一片片绿草如茵的操场
yī piàn piàn lǜ cǎo rú yīn de cāo chǎng
What's wrong, Tong Tong?
I have an article
that I'd like you to review.
Okay, leave it here.
I'll look at it later.
I'd like you to look at it now.
This is an article I want to submit
to the school newspaper.
I'd like your feedback.
It's not long,
just 5,000 words.
The beginning is well-written.
Could you please review all of it?
I'm not quite satisfied
with the middle part,
especially toward the end.
Please give me
some suggestions for improvement.
Tong Tong, it's like this.
I have some work to finish right now.
When I'm done,
I'll take my time
to review it properly, okay?
Then you can continue with your work.
I'll read it aloud to you.
The youthful days,
with grassy playgrounds,
tree-lined paths, and classrooms
-Tong Tong.
-full of the scent of books…
Tong Tong.
I don't think you need to read it all.
I already told you,
once I finish my current work,
I'll review it properly later.
What's wrong, Tong Tong?
I have an article
that I'd like you to review.
Okay, leave it here.
I'll look at it later.
我想让您现在帮我看看
wǒ xiǎng ràng nín xiàn zài bāng wǒ kàn kàn
I'd like you to look at it now.
这是我想投稿给校报的文章
zhè shì wǒ xiǎng tóu gǎo gěi xiào bào de wén zhāng
This is an article I want to submit
to the school newspaper.
I'd like your feedback.
想请您给我提点意见
xiǎng qǐng nín gěi wǒ tí diǎn yì jiàn
It's not long,
不长
bù zhǎng
just 5,000 words.
就五千字
jiù wǔ qiān zì
开头写得不错
kāi tóu xiě de bù cuò
The beginning is well-written.
Could you please review all of it?
您全部帮我看看呗
nín quán bù bāng wǒ kàn kàn bei
我觉得我的中间
wǒ jué de wǒ de zhōng jiān
I'm not quite satisfied
with the middle part,
特别是结尾的部分
tè bié shì jié wěi de bù fèn
especially toward the end.
我自己不太满意
wǒ zì jǐ bù tài mǎn yì
Please give me
some suggestions for improvement.
您给我提提修改意见
nín gěi wǒ tí tí xiū gǎi yì jiàn
佟彤 是这样
tóng tóng shì zhè yàng
Tong Tong, it's like this.
我手头呢 还有些工作要忙
wǒ shǒu tóu ne hái yǒu xiē gōng zuò yào máng
I have some work to finish right now.
等我忙完了
děng wǒ máng wán le
When I'm done,
一会儿慢慢给你看 好吗
yī huì er màn màn gěi nǐ kàn hǎo ma
I'll take my time
to review it properly, okay?
那 您忙您的
nà nín máng nín de
Then you can continue with your work.
I'll read it aloud to you.
我在旁边给您读
wǒ zài páng biān gěi nín dú
青涩岁月
qīng sè suì yuè
The youthful days,
一片片绿草如茵的操场
yī piàn piàn lǜ cǎo rú yīn de cāo chǎng
with grassy playgrounds,
林荫小路
lín yīn xiǎo lù
tree-lined paths, and classrooms
佟彤
tóng tóng
-Tong Tong.
-full of the scent of books…
Tong Tong.
I don't think you need to read it all.
I already told you,
once I finish my current work,
I'll review it properly later.